So it's been about a week since my last extract. This next one is from the point of view of my second character. I think you'll figure out which one it is after reading this...
Please enjoy and review. At this stage, adjustments can still be made, but only if I am made aware of what I can do to improve.
2.
The
Dark Side of the Moon
The man rode on
horseback in the early hours of the morning. The wind whipped through his hair
and swirls of water vapour surrounded his mouth as he breathed. It was a dark
and dangerous forest. Many bad been led astray by mischievous faeries here
before. The young man feared not. This assurance compelled his brave steed
onwards. Laughter and music were heard mingled with screaming and moaning. The
young man knew all too well of the ways of the Unseelie court. They lured mortals
to the realm of Terrahgonia, in the forests that separated it from Nisyros.
There they were forced to dance with the faeries all night long and many of
them died from exertion, for mortals were incredibly fragile in comparison to
faeries. The young man saw the pleading eyes of a girl no older than himself.
He could not directly intervene, for the Unseelie court was ruled by a powerful
king. It had been the king who had allowed him safe passage through the forest.
He was not willing to handle the king’s
ensuing wrath. Instead, he muttered an incantation. That would be able to
protect the mortals for the night. The faeries would doubtlessly allow them to
rest. But they would never again see their families or live the lives they once
knew. No mortal was permitted to leave either Terrahgonia or Nisyros once they
entered.
At last, the rider
found himself in the capital city of Antalya. His horse trotted on the cobbled
streets where the second class citizens lived. It was becoming slightly more
common for mortals to earn their freedom, but even then they were not treated
with much respect. Their homes were a drab grey and they all seemed to slant
sadly. He saw a few mortals, who were still awake stare at him. It was uncommon
to see someone of his stature ride through their poor area. For the young man
was the Crown Prince of Terrahgonia. He found it rather nerve racking to be
stared at and rode on.
His mother’s castle
was much like usual. Before he could enter, he had to prove his identity to the
guard. He rolled up his cloak a bit and showed the guard his bracelet. It had
the royal crest on it and was therefore a symbol of power. The guard scanned
the bracelet with a detector. Although they were more commonly used to scan the
bar codes imprinted on the slaves, this one was programmed to check the
authenticity of guests as well. Terrahgonia liked to embrace technology and
regarded as closely linked to magic. The large iron gates were opened and he
rode onwards. The large castle was foreboding even without the darkness for
added affect. It had a gothic style with tall spires, and gargoyles that were
enchanted to watch the surroundings. Still, his mother, Queen Yolanda, insisted
on having warlocks and ogres patrol.
The interior of the palace was not as
sinister as one might expect. It was regal with high ceilings, and decorative
Corinthian columns. The ivory painted walls gleamed from the light of the
chandeliers. The ceiling and walls were beautifully gilded. But what dominated
this room was not the peculiar shade of green chosen for the carpentry, or even
the solid crystal doorway that led to the Queen’s private quarters. It was the
giant oil painting of Queen Yolanda, battling in the war that had led to her
gaining the throne. The prince often looked at it to remind himself what his
mother was capable of. He knew that there was no true way of knowing whether
this exact scene had ever happened but that horrific expression on her face and
the gleam in her eyes had been one he had seen firsthand. An ornamented gold
frame completed the piece. Prince Stefan was directed to the throne room, where
he found his mother, the queen, sat on her throne. On occasions when he visited
on business, there would be another throne for him to sit on. The prince knew
that his mother had a purpose to everything but she often kept him in the dark
about her plans. He hoped that she simply wanted to have some mother-son
bonding time but he realised how ridiculous that seemed. She had insisted that
it would be best to meet late. She was not usually nocturnal. She had always
teased him, calling him a creature of the night when he wouldn’t sleep on time.
She also knew his power was greatest during the hours of the night. No, this
was business, plain and simple.
The room had always
seemed rather bright to Stefan, for his mother’s personality. It seemed she had
redecorated. Small chandeliers hung at the left and right sides of the room,
suspended in the air. A purple strip of carpet ran along the marble floor,
complementing the plum and gold gilded walls. The obsidian Corinthian columns
with its gold laurel leaves were against the ancient Greek traditions. The
ceiling was decorated with the paintings of death scenes in battle. Many of
them showed the Queen herself, riding off into battle, hacking at enemy
soldiers. Prince Stefan looked to closely at one and it seemed to come to life
and played out the scene. He could clearly hear the sound of battle raging.
Horses whinnied and galloped all around.
“I hope you like my new arrangement”
Stefan was finally able to tear his gaze away. The prince walked across the marble
floor and stood before his mother. He looked hard into her violet eyes.
“Hello mother” He was still and formal,
giving her a respectable, short bow. She was as glamorous as she had always
been to him. Her skin never revealed her age, as she used a secret potion to
help her looking young. Her long dark hair cascaded past her shoulders. Her
dress was inspired by ancient Rome, stunning and regal.
“Oh pish, posh! There is no need for formality
here.” She smiled. “You’re my son. Besides, the guards are outside.” For a
moment there, where was a wild glint in her eyes. Whatever she was up to, it
would not be good.
“I noticed.”
“How have you been
darling?” She asked sweetly. It was strange to Stefan how normal his mother
could seem. But she was not. He knew she was a power hungry dictator. But he
played along.
“I’m fine, mother. And yourself?”
“I’d be better if you
visited more often.” She tightened her fist and Stefan was momentarily worried
that she was mad. But a bright light emitted from her hand and the worry came
to pass. She opened her hand and a bright, luminescent feather appeared. Stefan
had asked her mother about it and had been told that it was a present from his
father, he had given her. It was a phoenix feather. She often stared at it for
its beauty. It was a stunning mixture of reds and yellows of different shades.
Sparks seemed to sizzle from it and it was a wonder to the prince how his
mother constantly kept it. He wanted to push his mother to get to the point but
he had learned long ago that his mother would reveal information at her own
leisure, and there was no point pressing her to do otherwise.
“I imagine you are wondering why I
insisted that you came here so late?” She asked, moving her hand with the
feather in an elegant fashion. She watched as the feather followed. Stefan had
seen the feather many times before, but he was still mesmerised by it.
“I am sure you have a good reason”
Stefan did not truly agree with his statement but he knew it was prudent to
agree with her. His mother smiled at him- the same cunning that normally meant
something dreadful was about to take place.
“Tell the guards that it is time” She
replied ominously. The prince did as he was told without question. Questions
were often a waste of time. He opened the iron door and stepped out in the
corridor. The guards immediately straightened up, in attention. The ogres
always stood up straight and were rather serious about their jobs. It was the
warlocks who often slumped.
“The queen says it is time” The price
told them. The ogre’s twisted faced did not change but the warlocks looked
wary.
“Of course, Your
Highness” Two of the ogres swiftly walked away. Tension rose inside Stefan. The
last time his mother had a ‘wonderful surprise’, a lot of Terrahgonians had
gotten hurt. He knew she was capable of cruelties. Even the king of the
Unseelie court faeries was careful not to cross her. Stefan stood there, and
heard the familiar voice of a prisoner struggling. His stomach tightened. He
got a good view as the ogres dragged a teenager about his own age. His attempts
were futile of course. Ogres did not have much talent but they were definitely
strong. The prisoner looked slightly battered, but he had seen worse. His
shaggy blonde hair was dishevelled and his lip was split with dry blood. He
wanted to look away from the prisoner’s sorry state but he forced himself to
show no emotion. He had gotten enough practice in the past, after all. His face
was like a mask but guilt pricked at him from inside.
The prince walked into the throne room,
with the guards and the prisoner following just behind.
“Finally! I thought I would have to
wait until my son’s coronation!” Yolanda barked. The ogres sheepishly
apologised and left the room as swiftly as possible. The prisoner wore no
chains but he did not need to. The iron bracelets around his wrists bound his
powers. “Stefan, this is our lovely guest, James.”
“Guest?” The prisoner chuckled. “If
this is how you treat your guests, I’d hate to see how you treat your
prisoners.” Stefan knew of course that she was only trying to be pleasant. He
just did not understand why. She claimed that all prisoners were enemies of the
kingdom. They were branded criminals, plain and simple. Stefan was rather
amused by James’ bravery but was worried for his life. Yolanda was far from
amused. Her fake smile was wiped straight off and she made a tugging motion
with her hand. James bellowed in pain.
“I shall warn you to refrain from
angering me, James” Yolanda said, her voice soft and smooth.
“You’re already going to kill me. Why
should I give you the satisfaction?” The prisoner spat. Stefan respected his
bravery but also saw it as stupidity. He knew that she did not bother
attempting to be kind without reason. This prisoner must have been of some
value.
“I know who your family are. If you
care not for your own life, then perhaps you do for theirs.” James gritted his
teeth. “Just as I thought.” A small smile crept up her face. “James, this is my
son, Stefan. I am sure you have heard of him.” The prisoner looked at him
briefly and gasped.
“I don’t know whether I should bow or
kiss the floor at his feet.” He stated, feigning awe. This might have made the
prince laugh if his comment was not so detrimental. He wished that the prisoner
at least attempted to preserve his own life. The prince narrowed his eyes at
the prisoner and only had to suggest pain to the other warlock’s mind and he
did a double take, but stayed standing.
“You can start by showing some respect”
He warned.
“Honestly, James. I
do hope you do not treat all of your hosts this way”. The Queen stated, as if
it were his entire fault. ‘Only
partially’ Stefan thought.
“James here is a
piece of the puzzle” His mother stated. She let that sink in for a moment. “He
is the Guardian of the Moon.” She finally explained. It was like a punch in the
stomach. The prince knew what this meant. If Yolanda could get James on her side,
then everything could be ruined. His mother had plans of making him King once
she decided to retire but it was likely that she would live on for a long time.
The last thing he wanted was to become a puppet monarch. Stefan had big plans
for Terrahgonia, a land both in and separate from Faerie. But there were risks
to his plans and he knew what the ultimate price would be for failure. He had
not overlooked the Moon Guardian, but instead had intended to get to him first.
He showed a small smile in an attempt to appear normal but this facial
expression sickened even him. It was no surprise that the prisoner quickly
looked away from him. He wondered how he must feel. He must have felt alone,
vulnerable and scared. ‘I cannot involve
myself emotionally’ he remembered.
“What do you want with me?” The
prisoner asked; his voice now hoarse.
“We would like you to join us, as I
told you earlier” The queen raised her voice. It was never a good thing to make
Yolanda repeat herself. Why this buffoon was testing her patience, he knew not.
The prisoner shook his head slowly.
“No. I won’t.” Yolanda’s eyebrows
arched upwards in surprise. Stefan knew this was not a good sign.
“Come now, James.” The prince
intervened. “Do not be foolish. You could have riches beyond your imagination.
We could shape Terrahgonia together and bring it back to its former glory.”
“I don’t know whether you have
something stuck in your ears, your highness, but I have already refused.”
Stefan’s pleasantries vanished. He did not like being mocked and this prisoner
had gone too far. Surprisingly, his mother seemed rather cool and composed.
“Then it is decided.”
She nodded. She looked at her son with those cunning violet eyes of hers, a
sort of madness twinkling in them. Something terrible was about to happen. The
prince could feel it in his gut. “I think he needs to embrace his darker side”
She rose from her throne, and
gracefully descended from the dais. She raised her hand towards the prisoner
and his face contorted in pain, but there was some obvious resistance from him.
Most Terrahgonians unfortunate enough to be the victim of Yolanda’s tortures
would have been begging for mercy right now. But it seemed that James was far
from any typical warlock. Not only had he been impertinent, but it seemed that
he had more strengths than just talking. Was it even possible to control a
Guardian?
“Kneel to your Queen!” His mother exclaimed.
“I will not. I will...” The prisoner gritted
his teeth and then an excruciating roar erupted out of him. The prince watched
in fascination and terror as the prisoner began to kneel.
“Stefan, my son, it is time” She
ordered. The prince was not sure what was expected of him but he stepped
towards them. “Take my hand”. He understood she needed him. A part of him
wanted to refuse and help the prisoner but he denied these feelings. He knew it
would do no good now. He had a plan and he was to stick to it. Collateral
damage was expected. But how many more lives had to suffer before the kingdom
would be rid of a tyrant? One more it
would seem, he thought and then took his mother’s hand.
I hope you enjoyed this. Please let me know what you thought
Mufunde, out
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